review on Jianhui's WA2

Generally, the structure of the argumentative essay is quite organised. Some points to take note are grammar, sentence structure, and missing of transition words. There are quite a number of fragments present too. For example, in the first paragraph, the first and second sentence has the same problem (fragment).

Statistics and evidence are quite enough, which support the reason well. There are many citations; this shows that research has been done quite in depth.

In the second paragraph, fragments are present too. There are a few tense mistakes such as “to be use”. It should be “to be used” instead. Third paragraph, which is arguing the point of safety aspect, has little evidence. I think the evidence is needed to be elaborated more.

In conclusion, the reasons of arguments are stated clearly and the essay is organized. The writer just need to tidy up the grammar, fragments, and to elaborate the evidence more in depth.

Summary of article "A force to fight global warming"

Focusing on the ecosystems is recognized as a force to fight global warming. There are two reasons for concentrating on ecosystems to tackle the hazards of climate change. Firstly, ecosystems dominate carbon and other global biogeochemical cycles. Secondly, maintaining and restoring natural habitats are cheap, safe and easy.

Besides tacking the threats of climate change, natural ecosystems can benefit human in two ways. First, it can save lives and sustain livelihood. Natural ecosystems like mangroves can buffer against disasters and they also provide sources of income and food to livelihood. Next, there are untapped potential of the ecosystems such as enzymes that can break down agricultural waste into biofuels.

Both nature and human should see climate change as an issue. Governments should do their best to restore and maintain the ecosystems to fight global warming. Benefits to human are evident, thus governments should fight global warming with their countries as a whole.

Peer Review on Huang Bin's Essay

Generally, the essay is informative and it answers to the question given. There is little use of transitions between the paragraphs, but the flow of the essay is smooth. In the introduction paragraph, the two points are clearly stated at the end of the first paragraph, which is the thesis statement. The thesis statement is “Apart from removing and storing carbon to prevent climate change, the other two reasons why human should fight climate change along side with nature are (i) natural ecosystems can save and sustain lives (ii) nature still have a large untapped potential that humans can leech on.”

The second paragraph is elaborating on (ii) nature still have a large untapped potential that humans can leech on. I think that the paragraphs structure will be much better if the writer elaborates on (i) natural ecosystems can save and sustain lives before (ii). The last sentence of the second paragraph confused me. Does the inspiration of technological breakthroughs a supporting detail for point (ii)?

Paragraph three is well written and elaborated. Citings are decently done. In the conclusion paragraph, the purpose of the essay is re-inforced and the two points, (i) and (ii) are stated again. That is well-organised. A suggestion from me is to structure the sentences well, as some sentences are too long. Lastly, references are neatly done.

A brief Introduction about me...

Hi. My name is Eric Chan. I am currently pursuing a degree at National University of Singapore (NUS). Formerly from Singapore Polytechnic, I maintained my specialization, Mechanical Engineering.

Some time back, I was still wearing green, carrying a rifle, roaming around in the jungle. Like any other male citizen in Singapore, I served my National Service as a Logistics Officer. When I was in the army, i was always looking forward to the start of my university life.

Time flies. One semester has passed. University life is fast. In a blink of the eye, I will be in my last year, taking my final exam. In my life in NUS, I hope to learn as much things I can and know more friends.

My most important aim is to past all my modules and score well if possible. I hope what I can do is to work hard and be focused.

This is the end of my brief introduction. I simply hope this module will improve my English.